Description : Hey folks. I need some advice on how to improve this song. i love it.. it even got stuck in my head. but i need other ears to listen to this cringe. and see your opinions on this (warning crappy lyrics and crappy voices)

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  1. prizewell
    prizewell on Sun 17th Feb 2019 - 1 year ago

    Usually what influences me are the artists I listen to. This track can go several ways, listen to some radiohead, portishead, beck, prefuse73.. etc.

    Hope that helps.

    therednebula
    Reply by therednebula

    I'm influenced by an artist and sometimes a specific song as well.sometimes i'm influenced by several other things and try to take everything I like about all things that influenced me and mix it in a blender... when making this song I was influenced by Cell dwellers song called "Afraid this time" and I was influenced by Emile van kriekens music as well. (if you haven't heard of those two different artist, I don't blame ya. thank you for putting your thoughts on here.

  2. Indieground
    Indieground on Fri 15th Feb 2019 - 1 year ago

    "Improve" wil may be a bit tuff.... but if i was in your shoes this is what i'll do
    In my opinion, sometimes the best way to get a "better result" (your track in fine) is to take the liberty to cut into your mix/sounds.
    The "fx tuning voice" which appear from A to Z, cut it here and there, this way the melodic part of your track will be more "in front".
    sometimes less is more
    That the very first thing that came to mind
    (sorry for my english, i'm french)
    Cheers

    therednebula
    Reply by therednebula

    thank you. I will keep this in mind..

  3. Neomorpheus
    Neomorpheus on Thu 14th Feb 2019 - 1 year ago

    Hey Red, I think you have posed a difficult question here. I saw this yesterday, gave it a listen and then downloaded the track. I listened to it several more times and even imported it into my DAW and toyed with it some. What I ended up concluding or should I say, at this point in my opinion, there is no way to improve it. Only to change it. So I didn't respond.

    I thought about it again this morning and decided to comment. I was glad to see royalnations response. It kind of supports my opinion in a way.

    Considering the genre, you have created a weird and unique piece unto itself. So my question to you is "why do you think it needs improving" or "what type of improvements are you looking for" ? In other words I think it would be more beneficial for you to provide us a few more details. Such as: to make it more dynamic, or to give it more of a rhythm or beat or how to make it flow better as a song, etc.. Otherwise, what your likely to get is either a lot of harsh critique or little to no response.

    The thing that makes it so tough is the Weird genre. There really is no defined parameters to compare it to or judge it by. Weird is weird. What you have, definitely seems to fit so like I say, I think you should elaborate a bit more as to what you feel it lacks and then maybe we can better serve up some relative suggestions for you. I hope this make sense.

    therednebula
    Reply by therednebula

    thank you. I wanted criticism because I felt making this song was too easy and such and it was thrown together in like a week. so i was looking for advise on how to improve it for example was the bass to loud or the song is too quite etc. because I don't really have the best ear when it comes to mixing and mastering. the song feels complete to me but there is no such thing as a perfect track and i want to improve it in any way possible before I fully release this. again thank you for putting in your time to look into it. it means alot...

  4. royalnation
    royalnation on Thu 14th Feb 2019 - 1 year ago

    That's what I'm talking about! Now I know why you liked mine so much. You are different from the rest, and I can appreciate that in an artist. I like the way this song is just unique. The only thing I can even compare it to is maybe Skinny Puppy. Great job!

    therednebula
    Reply by therednebula

    thank you kind sir!

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Hear the sound
and follow it

don't be afraid
i'm still here with you
you wont walk alone

a place where i unwind
to avoid the paradigm

don't be afraid

time is my enemy
my refuge from reality

the place i forget
the stupid shit i had said

welcome to my hostile paradise
its where i leave everything behind

and restart and unwind

to avoid the paradigm

waste my time

the mindless repetition to a
never ending expedition
traped in a coma until dawn
envy and hate in the world im currently on

you cant escape paradigm

welcome to my hostile paradise
the place where i never die
the place where everything is mine

the place where i avoid the paradigm
you keep me going hostile paradise
without you i wouldve never realize my world was a waste of time...

my hostile paradise

you helped me define
my perception in life

my hostile paradise

you helped me align
what wasnt mine

my hostile paradise

you helped me outshine
the paradigm

my own hostile paradise

 


 

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